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Tell Me / Existence (which version do you prefer?)

Posted June 12th, 2007 by Sarita

This is a new (improved?!) version, re-titled - the original is below it - if you have a preference or opinion I'd like to know! To bracket or not to bracket ;-)

Existence

Now that I'm alone in the forest
If I fall
Will there be a sound?
And if there were
Would the waves reach the hunting ground?
And in your chase
Would you cup your ear
Would you still know
A wave from a drown?
Now that I'm alone in the forest.

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Tell Me

Now that I'm alone in the forest
If I fall
Will it make a sound?
And if so
Would the waves reach the hunting ground?
And in your chase
Would you cup your ear
(Would you still know
A wave from a drown?)
Now that I'm alone in the forest.

‹ an edited version... Safety Itself ›

Wow...Sarita...such wisdom,

On June 12th, 2007 at1ment says:

Wow...Sarita...such wisdom, honesty, such expressed beauty and grace comes through, by you being you...ty...:)'s mike

Thanks again! How do you

On June 13th, 2007 Sarita says:

Thanks again!
How do you find the new title and version?
Sarita

not to skip the subject, but

On June 13th, 2007 at1ment says:

not to skip the subject, but I Looooove them both...how about that:) they could be part 1 and 2 of the same beautiful script, poem or play... i like the modifications u made on the second but i also equally enjoy the first with it's parenthesis and all...hmmm...i connect with, i just love the way u write...it puts me at ease...like, on a hot sunny day, the most gentle kind of breeze...i'm a "creative expressor" but you my dear are a Poet in the truest sense of the word...miguel:)